This is my Blood story. I'm blogging this because it's true, and it happened in 2011, when I was 5.
Picture this: A nice afternoon, at Parkvale school, with three boys on their bikes, riding on the courts. Me, Luke and Finn are having wonderful time on our bikes. I stopped at the picnic tables, where my dad was sitting. He said to me “Lachlan, why don’t you go on the grass?”. “OK” I said. I took off. As I got closer to the grass, I started to slow down. I went onto a bumpy surface just before the grass. “What was that?” I thought.
Suddenly, my bike went sideways. I tried to regain balance, but I failed. CRASH! I hit the grass. When I turned around to get up, my bike turned with me. Instantly, I felt 2 pains: My left hand and my right knee. Once I pushed my bike off me, I looked at my left hand. There was a 1.5 centimetre cut. Then I sat up and looked at my right knee. It had a dot with three lines coming from it. The centre line was deepest, but still, all three lines had blood coming out. I felt like I had birds flying around my head.
Then Dad rushed over, with Luke and Finn behind him. “Lachlan, are you OK?” asked Dad. I shook my head. He helped me get up. When I tried to walk, my right knee collapsed. Dad carried me to the car and when we got home mum put a plaster on my knee. I still have the scar on my left hand.
When: 2011Who: Me, Luke, Finn and DadWhat: Bike crashWhere: Parkvale SchoolWhy: Because my bike went on something bumpy.
This is a great piece of writing here Lachlan! I really like that you have used lots of speech marks and have the correct punctuation. I really like how dramatic you have made this! Really makes me think that it was traumatic for you.
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